Project III Roughcut from Caitlin on Vimeo.
Screening Critique:
- Meld the text into the black? They appear too quickly for the audience to see -- try a new way of placing the type
- First crossfading headshot isn't really necessary
- Keep the lighting
- Don't really need all that text -- message is a little long (do you need to specifically say cancer?)
- Pay attention to the lighting: if it keeps changing it makes it seem as if there is a lot of passing time
- Zoom up on the face? More angled shots? It's just the same one angle for a period of time during the message
- People actually liked the green flashes! (but only because it suggested panic... play with that?)
- Ending is okay as it is, doesn't seem unfinished and leaves the viewer hanging
- Leave more black space at the beginning and end
- Blanketing the scenes with music, text, and imagery is starting to make it look like a commercial
- Moderate volume levels of the sounds
- I myself might remove the mention of 'cancer'
Some footage shot earlier in the morning:
Project III: Another Lighting from Caitlin on Vimeo.
The sun was too bright though, so I chose to re-film during the evening instead.
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